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My Nightmare
It is half past twelve
And I’m tossing in bed
I think I hear you
But that is all in my head

This is the third night this week
I toss and wake to my screams
In my nightmares you live
When once you were part of my dreams

I grip my pillows tight
And cry out so many tears
But if I close my eyes again
The blackness returns me to my fears

In my dreams
I can see the pain
As death took you from me

I relive that dreadful hour
Every night
And this is what I see

There I am
Holding you in my arms
And giving you a tender kiss
When from behind
A monster with a knife
Stole my love and bliss

He stabbed you deep in the back
With a knife as dark as his eyes
And falling to your knees
My heart broke
And life lost all her ties

I try to comfort you
In my arms
Tell you everything will be okay
But that monster laughs
And kicks me in the face
Before running away

I crawl to crouch over your body
Holding you tight to my chest
Crying
You try to speak
But the blood trickles
Down your mouth
Slowly drying

I see the pain in your eyes
As you struggle to talk
I hold back my tears
But before you can say a thing
You die in my hands
As the blood smears

There upon the floor of the park
I wail and pour out my soul for you
And before the ambulance comes
To take you from me
I lay my head on your chest
And there I die too  

(c)2004 Joseph Palladino
A piece I started a couple of days ago just evolved into this as I wrote it this morning. It deals with loss and pain which I am feeling now for unrelated reasons. I hope you like.
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orchestrastar101 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is sad… it's exactly like a dream I had once.
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requishna Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist
as sad as this is... to me it is also hopeful.
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BlackKittenCat101 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2010
I can feel as though I can relate in some way.
as this make me think of all the restless night that come a long to me.
i love this as well
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birdlover123 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2010
Wow...it's almost like you're Edger Allan Poe.
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kbazuri Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
This is an amazing piece. I can really sense the emotions and feelings in it, as if I were the main character! Very nicely done!
:+fav:
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DarkStory Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow...that..is deep...very very deep...
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deathangel219 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2008
very good as the heart speeks the feelings become words written and shared with the world
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CAIROLOL Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2008
-sob- it's sad, but also very well written. :hug:
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karinsaboz1 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
sad....but awsome work!!
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ArtOfKaos Featured By Owner May 7, 2008   Writer
definitely a favorite.. i can relate to it too.. not nesseceraly how it does to you but i love it.. it's amazing
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Mymorbidfairytale Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
This is a really beautiful in a really depressing way, I love it.
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noneyabiz Featured By Owner May 9, 2007
Man i really LOVE it i have faved tons of your stuff!!! you have real talent!! you can completly feel the pain being described !!! im watching out for more of your stuff! MUCH LOVE FOR IT!!!
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sweettarts Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2007
Amazing
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Morphata Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2006   Filmographer
WOW. It's so sad yet amazing
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HardshelledCrab Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005
amazing...
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Imm0rtalfr3ak Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2005   Writer
Wow, that was amazing! :wow:
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ultimatekai Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2005  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*cries*
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2005
:hug:
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Zeroknight Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2004
I have re add this piece to my fav
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2004
lol, ok
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wolfrunner13 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2004   Writer
...wow...
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cirgy Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004
wow wat a powerful piece...man, u have talent w/ words...wow..im speechless..beautiful but sad at the same time..
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004
thanks, i paint with words :)
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:iconcirgy:
cirgy Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004
haha nicely said! :D
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Valdonis Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2004   Writer
dark!

damn good though, nice work.
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roguedementor Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2004
oh jeez... youre gonna make me cry!

extremely well-written. it sort of reminds me of the song "my last breath" by evenescence.
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:iconjphnx22:
jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2004
oh i absolutely love that song
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:iconroguedementor:
roguedementor Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2004
yeah i do too!!! it just reminded me of it for some reason.
youre really really good, by the way :)
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dulistno9 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004
the imagery is very vivid
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004
thankyou
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FreakingMuse Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004  Professional General Artist
i adore the last two lines. very emotional and sad but still it is very beautiful
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004
thanks for your adoration :)
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wastedlove Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004
That is sad but also very good, you are really talented and I am looking forward to reading more of your poems.
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004
thank you so very much
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Rosytoadfoot Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004  Student
.........................depressing
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loveistheanswer Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2004
This poem is....something else. The imagery is just so damn vivid, you're sucked into it. Problem is, you start hurting just as badly as the one it's happening to, if not more so, since you see it all and can do absolutely nothing, trapped under your own pane of glass. This is just so damned raw and heartbreaking...it's been a while since a poem has moved me so. And I love the closeted use of rhyme, by the way. It adds just enough rhythm and movement to move it along, but the lone pair amidst all the lines just looks so utterly alone...even more for the pain/loneliness/loss theme.

I think I have to read more of your work now. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful job.
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Ardal Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
I have to say this poem just deserves to be a fave for everyone but it sad for what you have lost :sniff:
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
thanks :glomp:
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Aladdin-Sane Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
Exaggerated emotion in the most literal sense. Interessant.
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
all take that as a good comment
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starstarx Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
lost love.. its deeply emotional to some.. nt bad.. wish u best
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
thanks. oo i like your avatar XD
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starstarx Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2004
yr avatar is hot too =) lolx
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2004
thanks :)
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Marytz Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
oh my.. this is .. wow.. really, i loved it.. very good poem, very intense..
sorry for your loss..

:+fav::hug:
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
no thankyou for caring :hug:
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Marytz Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2004
:handshake: :nod:
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musicfan Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2004
very well written
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jphnx22 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2004
thanks :)
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momo63 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2004   Photographer
omg. this is beuatifllu written, but very dark , sad and lonely. extremly raw, i love it to bits. amazing job and im sorry for your loss
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