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Fallen Angel
Crawling in my forlorn appearance
I hide my soul behind these tattered wings
Tattered and broken as they are
Plucked of light, stained in tears and blood.

In quiet despair upon the cold earth
Smeared in dirt I crouch upon my weary knees
And clutched timidly between my fingers
Rests one last jewel of Hope.

A single unblemished plume plucked
From the silver light of dawn
A feathered ray of light from beyond
To illuminate the void that has me bound.

This precious barb of silk
Once lost as I was and forgotten
Blazes now to immerse me in radiant bliss
To wash away the pain, draw me from the abyss.

So now I fade away…
My tender flesh removed
My shattered wings released
My inner light unsheathed… escapes.

(c)2004 Joseph Palladino
an angel who turned from the light now embraces it in death

The amazing photomanipulation [link] above is by :icondarksidegoddess: and she was more than kind enough to let me use it as a preview.



>>>>>>>To view a cliche-free version follow this [link] <<<<<<<
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senpaiyin Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
wow...
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Xx-FaLLenAngel-x Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Student General Artist
<3 i cant even respond
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Firedragon01 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I simply have no word to describe the beauty of this poem.
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JayCookie1997 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconcryforeverplz: SO BEAUTIFUL!!~
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i-love-daisy Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
that is a beautiful poem and i don't mind if it cliche :)
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Vuittonangel Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013
This reminds me of a character out of a book I read he was called patch
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chocochillibabe Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it has a kind of sad beauty about it
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franciszeks Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013   Interface Designer
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ilovezaynmalik16 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow! its great i luv it
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Student Writer
I like it a lot of nice imagery and blends well together :)
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purplesquiggle Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this!!!
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blaumoond Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
this is rally good
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MarenOlava Featured By Owner May 16, 2013
i like it
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moonheartstar123 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
amaazing
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The14thMusician Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful!
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arcticwolf313 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazing...
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:icondrowningdarkness0123:
omg this is awesome!!
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:iconfresh-t:
Fresh-T Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Eh... I guess this just isn't my kind of poetry. Doesn't really churn me in any way. No disrespect.
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The14thMusician Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Excuse me? What's wrong with it, and what kind of poetry do you prefer?
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Fresh-T Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
There's nothing wrong with it, it just isn't my taste. I'm a little lost in the plot and purpose. I guess I prefer narrative poetry rather than poetry that tries to paint a picture. Again, no offense to the writer.
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:iconthe14thmusician:
The14thMusician Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hm... thank you for your reply. Now I know what others like as well. Could you look at my gallery, and comment on which you prefer?
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Fresh-T Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
Of course! It'll be my pleasure.
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The14thMusician Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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summer164 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
that was amazing i loved it.[link]
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unholielove Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow, just wow. This is amazing work. :)
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:iconninjaturtlesrock:
NinjaTurtlesRock Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
He looks like Jin off of tekken
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:iconmitsukai924:
mitsukai924 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
I love this!!!
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rocklovingwolf100 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think that that is one awesome poem! I love the picture.
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philippv745 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
While I really like the theme and wording, the rhythm really needs improvement.
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philippv745 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Actually I take it back. I read the poem a second time and the rhythm is fine.
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Bloodyangel0510 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
i have this exact same pic!!!!!
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lilmonkiangel Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
I love this! And maybe I'm being really biased and this isn't a good poem. I'm not so much into poetry in the first place, but all the pretty words and the picture really kind of won me over on this one. :D
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rockPolotics Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012
the only real problem i have with this (i don't care about cliches for the most part) is that it's really hard to read! i mean, the rhyme scheme (if there is one) is all over the place, lines are so erratic, stanzas have no common ground.
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FlyingFlawed Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student General Artist
It's actually a quite effectifve free verse, no need to rhyme. The lines may be a bit on the erratic side but I have no clue what you may mean about no common ground amoung stanzas. I actually found it to be quite a nice poem.
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rockPolotics Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
Maybe it is just me and my personal preferences, which is hard to get around when "commenting", but I just feel like it's awkwardly straddling the line between poem and narrative. I'm not saying it has to rhyme, but it needs a bit more oomph, because when I read it, I don't particularly feel anything. When I read this, I see a angel, near-death, accepting his/her death and "flying". I don't actually recall what I meant by "common ground", maybe it was just another thing about how erratic the lines were.
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FlyingFlawed Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Well we all have preferences :) I can understand what you might mean about needing more oomph. Personally if I had written I would have rewritten three times before putting it up so the oomphier the better!
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FantasyTwins Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this reminds me of the book Hush Hush!
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lilmonkiangel Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
haha. So I'm not the only one!? That could definitely make a Patch up there :)
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:iconfantasytwins:
FantasyTwins Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh i know! have you read all the books?besides the last one.
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:iconwram8:
wram8 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Thats the one im waiting for!!!( just a hush hush fan passing by...lol)
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:iconfantasytwins:
FantasyTwins Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i just got it and its so hard to read because i know its the last one...:( ( lol its ok im love hush hush too!!)
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wram8 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
aww...man...i want to read it but hesitant to buy it casue i know its the last!! is it good so far though? :(
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FantasyTwins Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yes! so far awesome but really sad...
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:iconwram8:
wram8 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
oh man i cant wait to buy it i want to read it so bad :(
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lexie11 Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
awesome
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